Swords and Cues

Question by IssyH: What do you think of this begiening?
sorry i know i have already asked for this already i just need a few more peoples opinoins it is rough but the idea just came to me

The press snap pictures and write their quotes as she watched through tinted glass, she steeled herself and slowly crept out of the car. Suddenly everything was very sharp- human rights activists screamed their slogans for and ageist the Shadow blades the reporters shoved their way towards her shoving microphones in her face asking her questions that she refused to answer. A young woman with her child told her to leave and go back to hell- her child stood crying at her side, tugging at her sleeve trying to catch her mother’s attention.
She pushed her way into the building nodded at the security then walked into the bathroom. The sickly green lights made her feel sluggish as she walked to the mirrors, her elbow length brown red hair fell into her grey blue eyes- she wanted to splash her face with cool water… but she had spent hours that morning making herself look respectable, long black lashes brushed her cheeks and deep black eyeliner made the colour of her eyes even more striking. Breathing very deeply she slapped her cheeks with cold hands. And Cree walked into the conference room.
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Night time was still, wispy clouds coloured like lavender were light ageist the pitch black of the sky. The moon stood chalky high above the snowy suburbia. I walked slowly through the unmarked snow my old motorcycle boots crunched in the unmarked snow cold seeped through my jeans at the rips on both my knees, my soft leather jacket was warm and perfect for the weather.

A small crunch alerted me to the T’che approaching someone’s house- a little one at the end of the street. I jumped on to someone’s oak tree clambering up in a few seconds until I was near the top, it was slithering up to the front door. T’che’s are parasites that lodge in your body and slowly eat away at your organs-enjoy your dinner? cus it gets worse- they like young tissue so babies are perfect for the job… they stay within the body for three or four years before clawing its way out… but their also dumb shits …so that balances things out. I jumped from the first tree onto another one closer to the snake like creature then I launched myself to wards it.

As I flew through the air as I called Eva, little black wisps of smoke breathed into my hand and solidified to create a dark silver dagger with a black oriental hilt. Eva was my Shadow Blade and I was a Shadow Warrior- Oh god, the dam thing was huge three times my size- great…just peachy.

I landed softly and immediately it spun round to meet me its huge blue eyes angry as venom dripped from the canines that spiked out of its mouth it lunged for me. But changed direction half way… cunning basted now I had to rethink things
I jumped up and kicked hard into the strong jaw sending a jar up my leg. I pulled Eva to the left and the tip stayed were it was- she grew into a sort of samurai sword that I was expert at using. I stabbed the long spine and it screamed like no tomorrow everyone was turning on their lights now… dam it!

Damit! I heard voices…

DAM IT! Doors were opening! Why wouldn’t it fucking die?

I hacked at it again till it stopped moving it gurgled as blood seeped through its teeth. Hurriedly I sent Eva away and she dispersed back into black smoke. But by then the humans had seen her…
Shit
umm can i just add that im dyslexic so any pointers on my spelling and grammer are just going to fly over my head as i cant do either of thouse things so i kind of figurd that half the words arnt spelt right…

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Answer by Abbe
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